Read the sentence.When I attended the aquarium’s marine camp, I had a pleasant time studying nocturnal sea animals like the squirrelfish.Which word should be replaced with a more precise word?
Read the sentence from a personal statement.My trip to the car show got me thinking about my future.Which is the best way to revise and expand the sentence to relay the writer’s experiences more precisely?
Read the introduction to a personal statement.(1) Usually, when people talk about "rocky” relationships, it’s with a frown, but mine has enriched my life. (2) I became fascinated with rocks when I was really young, and throughout my childhood you could usually find me with my pockets bulging from whatever stony treasures I’d scavenged that day. (3) When my science teacher taught us a unit on geology, I realized that my fascination could become an exciting career that could also help me make good money. (4) Obtaining an internship to work on the geological exhibit at the museum is an important step on my road to being a geologist.
Read the introduction to a personal statement.Ever since the summer we visited the New England seashore, I’ve been drawn to the ocean. I’m amazed by the variety of things that exists under the surface of the waves. I could spend the rest of my days learning about the ocean’s mysterious ways and never come close to learning all its secrets.
In a personal statement, the writer’s point of view explains the writer’s
Which sentence contains the best example of precise details?
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Read Marie’s conclusion to her personal statement.Ever since our class designed a website, I’ve been excited to learn more about how to write my own computer programs. Getting that small glimpse into programming made me realize how much more there is to know.
Read the introduction to a personal statement.Usually, when people talk about "rocky” relationships, it’s with a frown, but mine has enriched my life. I became fascinated with rocks when I was really young, and throughout my childhood you could usually find me with my pockets bulging from whatever stony treasures I’d scavenged that day. When my science teacher taught us a unit on geology, I realized that my fascination could become an exciting career that could also help me make good money. Obtaining an internship to work on the geological exhibit at the museum is an important step on my road to being a geologist.
In the body of a personal statement, the writer should include
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